Talk:My Journeys with the GPS
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Saw you were looking for advise from M.O. and decided to stick my nose in where it wasn't asked.
As far as I can see is, the central theme isn't clear. Who wrote this article (besides you)? Meaning, is this an ad for a product? If someone came up with GPerSona(C) it would belong to a company. Perhaps this is something like an infomercial.
Oh, okay, I see. The beginning is a driver getting frustrated with his GPS and this GPerSona(C) promises to ameliorate his difficulties. Okay. I'm not clear what is so frustrating about the GPS. It seems to be giving good directions. So, if GPerSona(C) is the central conceit, how do we make it appealing?
Here's a couple of spitballs:
Use your "Worst Case Scenario" as the opening with a tag line of something like "Has this ever happened to you?" The GPS owner gets his ass kicked by thugs, he feels like shite, and it's all his GPS' fault. So what does he do? He buys a new GPS with GPerSona(C) and here's all the wonderful stuff he gets..!
Okay, here's another idea - the owner of the GPS is Cockney and can't understand what his unit is saying, The clear English is beyond him, so he gets custom GPS which speaks his language.
as a button you could do: "Call now! Operators are standing by! But that's not all! Order in the next 30 minutes and we'll include this set of steak knives (or: We'll include GPS Classic! (aka, a map)).
Also, the Russian voice needs to have broken Russian syntax.
Hope this helps. Good luck! --Super90 23:29, 11 December 2006 (UTC)
edit Just added audio version of the article
You can thank me later once the article is featured. --21:38, 31 December 2006 (UTC)
edit From Pee Review
Based on real occurrences, I humbly display my new piece. All hail MO for his marvelous pics....20:24, 26 December 2006 (UTC)
- To be honest? I have the full intention of nominating this on VFH as soon as possible, if you have no protests, i.e. you want it to be on Pee Review longer before it's up for featuring. Otherwise, its great, and MO's pics are great. -- §. | WotM | PLS | T | C | A 04:31, 27 December 2006 (UTC)
Me? Objections for VFH? never! :)11:54, 27 December 2006 (UTC)
Thanks!--18:31, 1 January 2007 (UTC)
edit just a point
Just to be a spoil-sport, the picture with Stalin in it does have right turns. Just to say is all. Otherwise, very very funny. --18.104.22.168 16:28, 13 February 2007 (UTC)