Talk:Low (album)

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Humour: 8 Not sure on the quotes but the intro is funny stuff, the talented musicians writing it for him is very clever. I don't really get the Limey dork reference but thats probably just me, nice intro though.

In the first section the first paragraph is good, however the second isnt really that funny in comparison, maybe try and "funny it up", at the end about Bowie's reputation, could easily fit another jibe in there. The third paragraph much like the first is good but its an ugly tranny not and ugly tranny.

In the second section I'll add the obvious mistakes in the prose part, first paragraph is pretty good, I don't have any complaints as you can see really it flows well just a few little errors that are a two minute job. I like the bit in the second paragraph about blowing the brains out, this is a very good article.

The third section the opening line makes little sense in reference to the studio name, could do with rewording. Howver the rest is all good, I recommend this for VFH after you fix a couple of things, I'm only on the third section too!

The forth section could be a little funnier, the first paragraph should take the piss a little more, especially if you mention the 80's. Second paragraph ends it will, awesome article.

Concept: 7 Its risky doing anything band related let alone a sole album, however, you've pulled it off. The idea is ok but the implementation is brilliant.
Prose and formatting: 4 Small errors, but I'm very picky about these. "experimental album deals with worship of Bowie's 'void'" should be "experimental album deals with the worship of Bowie's 'void'".

"There aren't any themes" should be "there are no themes". Aren't any is incorrect English, I don't how coked up you are, its no excuse.

"The instrumental tracks were haphazardly composed duding various drug binges across Europe" I think you mean "The instrumental tracks were haphazardly composed during various drug binges across Europe"

"as the Ziggy outfits made Bowie look like and "ugly tranny"" should be "as the Ziggy outfits made Bowie look like an "ugly tranny"

"record the entire album Château d'Hérouville, Hérouville, a French recording studio" needs rewording.

Images: 8 Images work fairly well and the captions are also good, they are just ordinary pictures though so I've given you the most I can.
Miscellaneous: 7 Averaged in my head, smart huh?
Final Score: 34 Very good article, a couple of fixes and it's ready to be featured.
Reviewer: --The preceding signed comment was added by Projectmayhem666 (talk • contribs). 13:39, 16 March 2009 (UTC)
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