Hey I forgot to log on when I saved this version, so I don't get any credit, but I thought it was an ok idea - preserving the poor original author's work while making somewhat of an actual article. If anybody else has some ideas, feel free... --Jabizzle 02:40, 22 June 2007 (UTC)
- It's not exactly a good kind of different, either. VfQD? --Sir Erwin Rommel 22:55, 19 May 2007 (UTC)
I tried to make this article better, but the famous quote was all that came to mind. I don't think it's enough to save the page, though. However, I don't think we should just delete it, especially since it's on such a common phrase. I'll put a "potential" template, maybe then others will think of good ideas. --Ye Olde Luke 00:18, 23 May 2007 (UTC)
It reminds me of a bit from "Amazon Women on the Moon"; the segments about "Black Men Without Soul". Maybe if "I don't know what to write" were turned into a charity to help "people who don't know what to write": Send your words and phrases today! If you can't afford a whole word, even a couple of letters will help! Editors are standing by. Remember, an idea is a terrible thing to waste. --Maxnort 20:15, 4 January 2008 (UTC)
edit Pee #1
|Humour:||5||As the score indicates, the humor is the weakest section. I don't think it's terrible, it's an interesting and clever read - unfortunatley I didn't lol or giggle. It's obviously repetitious. HTBFANJS says this can be a good thing, or it can make the joke dead. In this situation, it's not very good. That said, a bit of variety is in need. I have a few ideas that come into my mind. The first one is the narrator blurting out "I know" every now and than. The second one is perhaps the author doing outside things besides writing the article, i.e. taking a bathroom break. Or think of something better, my ideas aren't great. I know you can, you're a creative person.
I also think this article needs a different approach. It's a bit injokeish at parts, such as when it states HTBFANJS, how to write a featured article, the Main Page and so on. Instead, perhaps state "I don't know what this place is. How does it work? or "I don't what what I'm doing right now. What am I doing?" These lines I wrote could be much better but these are just some ideas on how to include the in-jokes.
Whatever you do with the article, I suggest keeping the final line. That was a strong ending.
|Concept:||6||The concept of self reference has been done before. Still, in this form, this concept is original.|
|Prose and formatting:||7||Nice use of formatting, links, paragraphs, pictures etc. This is good in a way, but is also bad in a way. I think it should use bad formatting because an ignorant n00b could not write an article with excellent formatting. If you do this, you could include a line saying "I don't know why this article looks so ugly."
Finally, if you keep nice formatting, or switch to bad, this article needs headers. That was the weak part of the formatting
|Images:||8||Good images, espacially the first one. The second one isn't needed as it's not very funny and it doesn't add much IMO. If you decide to keep it, you should largen the pixel size.|
|Miscellaneous:||6||I think this is a nice article and rewrite, espacially for a first draft.|
|Final Score:||32||32 - pretty decent score and under UN:PRG, the article would be Nearly adequate/adequate so nice job my friend. Just work on it more and this will shine.|
|Reviewer:||--19:28, 6 February 2008 (UTC)|
edit Pee #2
|Humour:||5||Jason shooting the author was a bit random. Why not have the author run into a wall with regards to wiki formatting and end up fucking the article up in a very amusing manner? I think that might be a good ending.
You can take this criticism or not, but the "Chink" caption on the first image I thought was out of line. Used tastefully (and I can't believe I'm going to finish this sentence), racism and ethnic slurs can be funny, but this one is just too out of context to be perceived as anything but stupid.
Truth be told, I found the rest of the article to be hilarious, but those two moments brought it down. The second one especially. I suffer from liberal guilt, I know.
|Concept:||7||Not the most original of articles - I've seen many articles around written in the first person and sort of... stream of consciousness I guess is the style I'm looking for here. That being said, it is still a very good example of this variety of article.|
|Prose and formatting:||8||Solid yet conventional wiki article formatting. See my comment above: I think a first time article writer with no experience should fuck the article up with humorous (but still legible) results.|
|Images:||7||I've got to give you props for the Gonzales picture and caption, but I thought the first image was lacking. Two total images does seem like a good number to have for this length of article.|
|Miscellaneous:||9||I would like to use this section to comment on length. I thought this article was a great length. It didn't wear out its welcome, but it was around long enough to milk just about all the humor I think you could milk out of the concept of a first time editor's pathetic attempt at writing an article. So you get points there.|
|Final Score:||36||Article well written, funny, etc. Very good overall. I've said everything else I can think of above.|
|Reviewer:||Gage 06:41, 13 February 2008 (UTC)|