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I wrote this article when I was barely awake and the result is rather weird. It's been marked as needing fixing, and now that I'm fully conscious I can see that it is a kind of lame idea. Can anything humorous be salvaged from this mess? The typos have all been fixed, anyway, but the article itself...I don't know. I need opinions!!!!!
|Humour:||4||Sorry to not have anything specific to say, but it just doesn't always click for me... je ne sais quois. But don't give up yet, because...|
|Concept:||8||...this one has potential. You could add parallel statistics, such as suicide rate, and the oft-touted pirate-to-global-warming rate. It's a little weighed down by...|
|Prose and formatting:||3||...the format, which subscribes to the "big-block-o'-prose" style. The prose itself is also pretty funky in places. It would be made more diverse by...|
|Images:||1||...pictures, which are entirely in absentia. But don't just stick in random crap, because...|
|Miscellaneous:||3||...the randomness humor in this article is annoying. I think this idea lends more to the straight-man, textbook style. Maybe it would even work better in UnNews.|
|Final Score:||19||Loose-cannon prose and randomness humor weigh down a compelling theory. Keep at it!|
A superb article! I really love the idea of the medieval boring period! You could add something on "climb-it" gate. I suppose it would have to be a controversy about how to climb a gate ... which funnily enough I'm a bit of an expert on. You really should climb the hinge end because it is strongest!
Love the picture of the kid yawning! 126.96.36.199 11:51, July 14, 2010 (UTC)