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edit Portalman13's Review for GLaDOS

This article has been heavily contributed to ... by me alone. Please feel free to edit and add content mercilessly, so long as it fits the general tone of the article.

portalman13 21:13, 3 June 2008 (UTC)


Humour: 8.6 GLaDOS Opening "Conversation"

I like how you used "the cake is a lie" in the opening conversation. But the opening conversation in the beginning wasn't that funny, put the second part was a scoff-and-smile.(6)

Early Use

Paragraph 1: Your use of comedy linking(even though there is only one) was witty and the funniest part was 24/5/08 1542.27.370(that was just a loud HA-HA).(8)

Paragraphs 2 and 3: Once again, your comedy linking was witty. When you make fun of something, you need to be original, and that's what you had: Originality.(8.8)

Paragraph 4(if the bullets count): I like how you OBVIOUSLY took a whole scene from 2001: A Space Odyseey and parodized it. I personally like the movie, but I also personally like your parody.(8.5)

Current Avg via {{Pee}}, 7.8

Paragraph 5: I like your use of sarcasm and annoyance in this one. (You need sarcasm to succeed!)(9)

Paragraphs 6 and 7: I LOVED how you used 4 parodies instead of just 1. And #7 was sort of like a "deadpan". One of my favorite types of humor are "deadpans".(9.7)

Role in the Portal project

As a whole: When you said "the Seven Hour War was the first war to be fought solely over Xbox Live on Call of Duty 4" I just cracked up. And your making fun of both Vista and OS X was somehow funny.(9.1)

Pop Culture Influence

What I like the most is a nice Pop Culture beat-it-to-death joke.(9.3)

Avg'd via {{Pee}}: 9.3 <---AVG ROUNDED TO NEAREST TENTH: 8.6

Concept: 9.5 9-10: The article looks like you had quite some time to create the article. It also maybe took some time to think the jokes up, as IMO they were pretty funny.
Prose and formatting: 8.6 Sentence fluency and Comedy Linking was good, but YOU NEED EMPHASIS AND STRIKEOUTS TO INDUCE MORE HUMOR. That's the problem with some people, who are prone to doing that.
Images: 8 It goes well with the article, but there are too few images to actually go with the article perfectly.
Miscellaneous: 8.7 Moar Avg'd-ing.
Final Score: 43.4 43 is a nice score for a funny article. I do recommend a VFH.
Reviewer: This is Paris Hilton's DJ Jasper's signature. ProfileTalkASA 15:37, 10 June 2008 (UTC)
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