Um ... apart from maybe a little tension added to the journey part, this seems about ready to me. I had to think twice before getting the joke in the end, which is a good sign. Yeah, and about the narrating joke: any other way it could be underlined? What if the other bunny just repeated "...McHoot, the Owl"? Subtlety might be funnier there since it's the beginning of the article and you might want to sustain the mood, particularly since the end takes the dark twist. -- Style Oranssiviiva Guide 04:15, 12 August 2009 (UTC)

Fly-By ReviewEdit

In a nutshell, the reader can see the "dark twist" from a mile away, which I believe is the main issue.

First off, your title is alerting the reader of the existence of a "dark twist", and should be changed to something that is less of a give away. Secondly, the lead-up to article also hints at the dark twist too strongly. It is way "too cutesy" for this wiki, so it alerts the reader that something is coming up. And more importantly the lead-up itself lacks much in the way of humor, which hints at the dark twist, makes the lead-up a bit vexatious to read, and the shortage of humor is bad in itself.

Sorry Mnbvcxz but I don't agree. Setting expectations - and fulfilling them to the letter - is one of the oldest and best ideas in literature, and in this bunny-wunny article it certainly does the trick. The main joke works for me and if it doesn't for you, it's because we have a different sense of humour. -- Style Oranssiviiva Guide 06:28, November 3, 2009 (UTC)
Also, does someone really think this article needs something still? It looks ready to me, has been so for ages. -- Style Oranssiviiva Guide 06:29, November 3, 2009 (UTC)
Also also, fucking great. Now someone has changed the title to the no-expectations way, which spoils it for me. Go read Iliad, where the expectation for destruction of Troy is set in the beginning and is repeated over and over. Tell me how many have missed the jokes in the early section because of the said expectations. Jesus Christ. -- Style Oranssiviiva Guide 06:35, November 3, 2009 (UTC)
Nah I take almost all of it back - it doesn't have to be in the title. But the title seriously was what made me read the article. If you want to drag in readers, give them expectations - even in a childish way. -- Style Oranssiviiva Guide 06:46, November 3, 2009 (UTC)

Also, the fact the reader is waiting for the dark twist may cause him to miss the jokes in the early section. --Mn-z 17:18, 12 August 2009 (UTC)

  • Also, I just realized this article contains squirrel sex. Some people have "issues" with that for reasons I don't want to get into. Can you change the squirrels to chipmunks? --Mn-z 04:38, 13 August 2009 (UTC)
    Uh, no. -- tense Ape (delay) (Riot Porn) 10:54, 13 August 2009 (UTC)
    What's the difference between squirrels and chipmunks? Sir SockySexy girls Mermaid with dolphin Tired Marilyn Monroe (talk) (stalk)Magnemite Icons-flag-be GUN SotM UotM PMotM UotY PotM WotM 11:00, 13 August 2009 (UTC)
    Squirrel sex just brings up bad memories for some users. --Mn-z 15:27, 13 August 2009 (UTC)
    You mean Slappy's Angels? Meh. Nobody cares about that anymore. Sir SockySexy girls Mermaid with dolphin Tired Marilyn Monroe (talk) (stalk)Magnemite Icons-flag-be GUN SotM UotM PMotM UotY PotM WotM 15:29, 13 August 2009 (UTC)
    Mn-z ermm..your comment about replacing squirrels with chipmunks was unintentionally funny . Yeah I know about Slappy's Squirrels but that was a different writer with a fixation about cartoon couplings involving the author and the animations. I don't think this article is anywhere near that area. --LaurelsRomArtus*Imperator ® (Orate). 10:51, 16 August 2009 (UTC)
    I'd still like to see Blue Velveteen Rabbit and Cannibunny Holocaust. They're next on the list, right? :D --El Sid, the lazy oneparlez-vous franglais? 13:26, 16 August 2009 (UTC)
    Apart from the Beatrix Potter/Watership Down/Magic Roundabout setting, the theme is close to that of "The Ones who Walk Away from Omelas" itself subtitled "Variations on a theme by William James" with a touch of Beavis and Butthead and Enid Blyton channelling the "Death by Bunga" story-all quite amusing. What sets great satire apart from the merely amusing, is relating it to some external injustice in an oblique way, as Swift did with his "Modest Proposal" 300 years ago, highlighting both poverty and the Poor House mentality in the UK.
Is there anywhere in the world where rape and murder and the active encouragement of it by the authorities or other states turning a blind eye to it out of self interest occurs today ? (Having the easily anticipated ending linked to one of these might lift it away from Beavis towards Dostoevsky or Le Guin) The My Lai Massacre? Incident on Hill 192? Rwanda?Darfur?Kosovo?Bosnia?Abu Ghraib rapes by USA soldiers ? Shabak rapes? Take your pick .Just a suggestion.)The displacement in nature of grey native squirrels by red introduced squirrels might provide a useful parallel to similar human plantations such as Ulster or the West Bank.The story offers a religious justification only?
Also on a more serious matter Gay and Transgender Squirrel Raping Rabbits are underrepresented in this tale reflecting the overweening PharmaMilitaryIndustrialVitaminComplex prejudice against alternative lifestyle lagamorphs who find themselves ill at ease in the nuclear family warren or burrow.-- ⦿⨦⨀ Phrage (talk) 05:19, August 26, 2010 (UTC

Pictures Edit

I'm considering this article for translation into German. Could you possibly find out where the pictures originally come from? Since we cannot take advantage of "fair use", we can only used CC oder PD material. And the pictures are soo cute, I'd love to use these. NaturalBornKieler (talk) Germany Flag 1 14:32, 19 August 2009 (UTC)

The first one is from Wikimedia Commons I believe, and the rest are unfair use. -- tense Ape (delay) (Riot Porn) 15:58, 19 August 2009 (UTC)


How about instead of the YouTube link being to the Happy song, let's Rick Roll them! --     Chompy domo-kun-small Mcpee Go Crazy Canadian flag icon Awards ~ Contribs ~ Gallery ~ Piglet 05:36, February 13, 2011 (UTC)