Talk:Filial Piety

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Humour: 6 Sometimes funny, sometimes not, but good dispersal.
Concept: 8 I suppose. I'd never heard of it, but it seems to be ripe for picking.
Prose and formatting: 9 No complaints here.
Images: 6 Same two, I'd put it up at RadicalX's Corner asking for more.
Miscellaneous: 7 It's a bit short, but I can see why. I have to say that it became a little uncomfortable to read, but I think some of that could be alleviated with a good picture. Like, for example, I would think that when Grandpa is becoming more of a pedophile (or at least finally revealing it), get a picture of an old guy in his underwear and put a caption like "Why not?" or something similar. If you do stuff like that, I think I'd like it more.
Final Score: 36 Expansion would do this wonders. Build on some of your more underdeveloped ideas, and then you'll be better off.
Reviewer: Sir Ljlego, GUN VFH FIYC WotM SG WHotM PWotM AotM EGAEDM ANotM + (Talk) 19:45, 31 May 2007 (UTC)

Humour: 7.5 A little better, a few key insertions here and there make a lot of difference.
Concept: 8 Same as before
Prose and formatting: 9 Same as before
Images: 7.5 I trust that you're working on it.
Miscellaneous: 7.5 Miscellany
Final Score: 39.5 A little better. I was thinking about it, and a major extension would indeed kill the joke. So don't try too hard. But maybe a sentence or two per category, as you did with the Confucius one, and the "my hand here" one.
Reviewer: Sir Ljlego, GUN VFH FIYC WotM SG WHotM PWotM AotM EGAEDM ANotM + (Talk) 20:34, 31 May 2007 (UTC)
Humour: 9 Not laugh-out-loud, ROFL funny, but it kept me smiling throughout the whole thing. Which I guess means it has good joke density. The humor is subtle yet comprehensible, something that's relatively hard to do.
Concept: 10 Although I had no idea what "filial piety" meant beforehand, the article makes it clear. Very good concept for an article, and I love the whole pedophilic grandfather theme. No need to change anything here.
Prose and formatting: 9 The prose was also very good, not only grammar and spelling-wise. This is a conversation between two people, and at times, the sentences seemed a little out of place or unnatural. Just keep that in mind. Aside from that, the organization and presentation were exact and well-ordered.
Images: 8 I can't say much for the images, but the captions were brilliant. The innuendo and back-and-forth dialogue were very clever.
Miscellaneous: 8 I liked how you were able to keep the last section (concerning the history) sensible and still funny, another thing you don't find much. Articles tend to fall apart at those segments. Very good beginning, middle, and end in this article.
Final Score: 44 I can't tell you what to change, because there's not much. This article is great as it is, definitely VFH worthy.
Reviewer: --Señor DiZtheGreat Cuba flag large CUN AOTM ( Worship me!) (Praise me!) (Join me!) AMEN! 21:31, 31 May 2007 (UTC)

edit What could be changed?

This is a perfect satire of the Filial Piety belief. With pictures of Kevin Arnold from The Wonder Years!! You know Fred Savage became the youngest person ever to be nominated for Outstanding Lead Actor for a Comedy Series for his role in this. He was 13, dammit! 13!! MegaPleb Dexter111344 Complain here 08:45, March 31, 2010 (UTC)

Wow, they finally featured this, hunh? Congratulations. It's Mrthejazz... a case not yet solved. 02:07, May 16, 2010 (UTC)
It's all TKF's work. Congratulations, TKF! MegaPleb Dexter111344 Complain here 02:10, May 16, 2010 (UTC)
Also, congratulations on having the worst feature EVAR!!!! Suck it TKF. Plab KUN TKF Tickler Woody111344 Go Fuck Yourself TKF Ban TKF! 15:37, May 16, 2010 (UTC)

edit Whoaa

When did this get featured??!-- Phlegm Leoispotter * (garble! jank!) 16:15, December 17, 2011 (UTC)

Damn, you really musta been gone long --Littleboyonly TKFUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUCK Oldmanonly 02:18, December 18, 2011 (UTC)
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