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|Humour:||4||*The jokes in the intro fall flat and are too widely spaced. Rommel being given a stick could be funny but in the way you have written it I almost missed the joke.
|Concept:||8||*You know a lot about Rommel and you stick close to the truth so that it sounds encyclopedic however the jokes are too subtle for my liking. If a joke is subtle it has to be clever but I'm afraid the majority of you r jokes aren't clever.|
|Prose and formatting:||5||*Break up the intro into paragraphs so that it is easier to read.
|Images:||6||*The first two images are fine but their captions are awful.
|Final Score:||28.8||A good attempt for a first or second article. You have got the right idea of sticking close to the truth and being encyclopedic so thr parody is there. You need to improve on your humour a lot though. I know a lot about Rommel myself and I appreciate it is a hard topic to make funny. Major improvement work.|
|Reviewer:||Sir ScottPat (talk) VFH UnS NotM WotM WotY 05:39, May 28, 2013 (UTC)|