Talk:Desperate Dates

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The poll was created at 07:58 on February 7, 2008, and so far 3 people voted.

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Good one! Brigadier Sir Mordillo Icons-flag-il GUN UotY WotM FP UotM AotM MI3 AnotM VFH +S 10:05, 6 February 2008 (UTC)

I dids all the images in paint. I can't afford potatochop =( --DyslexicRetard 14:15, 6 February 2008 (UTC)

Oh, and some of the images don't stretch the whole way across anymore because I used a freinds computer; it had widescreen, and the formatting was just fucked up. Hence, I'm playing it safe and making them small. Any suggestions? --DyslexicRetard 11:14, 8 February 2008 (UTC)

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Humour: 7.33 average of scores. you don't have 'sections', per se, so i took the liberty of dissecting your article at my discretion for reviewing purposes. just don't be mad if i forget to put the spleen back in the right place.

into/a bit about me:7

not bad at all, some good chuckle-stuff. to beat the fat joke into the ground(which is a good thing), his email should be something like 'mrstaypuft@hamsteak.com'. good use of indirect links.

first 2 tables:7

good, but the left side is consistently funnier than the right side. come up with more specific stuff for his match than 'any', such as for hair color, using 'chicken...I MEAN blonde...'

last table:8

some great stuff in here, but the earliest memory part is just distrubing and not funny. also the lard joke gets stale by the end, but the part about rolling in a drum is genius, so maybe change it to a drum of m&ms or somesuch.
Concept: 8 it's been done before, but this is very well executed.
Prose and formatting: 7 your formatting is good except for those tables, which you mentioned in the intro. they do look awful un-official-ish. try asking spang if he has any ideas, he's a formatting wiz, or so i've heard. if he doesnt have an answer he can at least point you to someone who does. maybe he can even help you take out the menus on the left.
Images: 7 the images are pretty good, and they shouldnt be too polished or else it wouldnt look like an actual website. most of the captions are good, but the first guy on the left doesnt seem funny enough. maybe have it say something equally douchebaggy.
Miscellaneous: 10 i award you the full amount of miscellany points for including this article in the category 'hot babes you don't have a chance with'. it made me laugh. a lot. congratulations.
Final Score: 39.33 you've got a good one here. i see you final score is 39.33, making this article high in the 'adequate' range. with some tweaks, better tables, and one or two more opinions, i'd say this could be vfh.
Reviewer: --SirGerrycheeversGunTalk 21:52, 6 February 2008 (UTC)


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Humour: 9 Oh how I laughed. Sure it did sort of look similar to my article but it worked. The pictures played well with the language. The only qualm I had was the more sexual parts, they were scary and disgusting (like a real date site). The jokes were placed the right distance apart in most places, though I couldn't really pick a few up. The beginning drew me in, the middle was good - maybe add a bit more to the interests part - ending was good.
Concept: 8 Good idea. Not that original, but good.
Prose and formatting: 7.5 Formatting was great, though more links would be decent, particularly the side ads. You put a lot of effort in. There were a few slight grammar errors, so just read over it again.
Images: 8 10 -1 for pixelation -1 for Header

The images made the whole thing work perfectly, this would be a 10 if the images weren't all slightly blurred. I particularly liked the side pictures and profiles. But there were quite a few places that were pixelated and the words on the header were out of line - Send it to Radical-X's corner and plead - they may be able to improve on it.

Miscellaneous: 8.375 Av'd
Final Score: 40.875 Good article you've got there. Could do well on VFH.
Reviewer: Sir DJ ~ Irreverent Icons-flag-au Noobaward Wotm Unbooks mousepad GUN
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