Talk:Colony of America

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If you continue to use the words England and Britain interchangeably as if they're the same place I will have to kill you.--Kelpan 22:20, 4 April 2007 (UTC)

Humour: 6 Well the humour is good, really, but some lines are just too obvious. Also it seems that you know the history really well, but try to say it in a different way, like more satire and stuff.
Concept: 7 Good concept, although the title could have been better, like Colony of America, or American Colony or other titles. Also I reckon an "encyclopedic" article is better than an article full of rhetorical questions. Just let it flows like an article.
Prose and formatting: 7 That is why images are important, so the article seems to have plenty of words. The current formatting is good but it could be better.
Images: 1 Only one image and it doesn't stand for the article, I reckon.
Miscellaneous: 5 Try to avoid "downgrading" the Brits, they are scary, really. It is just a joke but some English are actually reading these pages as well. Also from the way you wrote the article, I can feel an "angry" or "fiery" tone. Remember KIE (keep it encyclopedic) and deliver with a normal tone. I reckon it would be better.
Final Score: 26 Well it may seem a pretty "not-high" score, but I'm sure if you do some more work on it, the outcome will rock!
Reviewer: It's gneomI 08:21, 5 February 2007 (UTC)

Definately needs to be re-reviewed. --Emmzee the FuriousSpam me! Don't click here!

edit From Pee Review

I'm putting this through Pee Review again, tell me what you think. --Emmzee the FuriousSpam me! Don't click here!

Humour: 7 Starts out strong, loses a bit of steam towards the end, but overall a funny piece.
Concept: 9 I like it a lot.
Prose and formatting: 7 I love the frantic conspiracy-theorist tone. Its used well in this article. I think the formatting could use some work though (esp. in the area covering the wars).
Images: 5 I like the ones that are there, but it definitely needs more.
Miscellaneous: 9 You and I think similarly when it comes to word linking, which I like a lot.
Final Score: 37 I definitely dig this article. I made a few minor edits, but I think that you're on exactly the right track. I recommend that you go through with the next edits yourself, as you are doing well with the humor so far. There may be a few grammar issues that fall outside the article's styling; if you need any help with those issues, feel free to leave me a message to that effect. Good stuff. :)
Reviewer: THINKER 06:03, 15 April 2007 (UTC)
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