Talk:Colony of America

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This article was nominated for deletion on April 26, 2016.
The result of the discussion was Keep.

edit From Pee Review

If you continue to use the words England and Britain interchangeably as if they're the same place I will have to kill you.--Kelpan 22:20, 4 April 2007 (UTC)

Humour: 6 Well the humour is good, really, but some lines are just too obvious. Also it seems that you know the history really well, but try to say it in a different way, like more satire and stuff.
Concept: 7 Good concept, although the title could have been better, like Colony of America, or American Colony or other titles. Also I reckon an "encyclopedic" article is better than an article full of rhetorical questions. Just let it flows like an article.
Prose and formatting: 7 That is why images are important, so the article seems to have plenty of words. The current formatting is good but it could be better.
Images: 1 Only one image and it doesn't stand for the article, I reckon.
Miscellaneous: 5 Try to avoid "downgrading" the Brits, they are scary, really. It is just a joke but some English are actually reading these pages as well. Also from the way you wrote the article, I can feel an "angry" or "fiery" tone. Remember KIE (keep it encyclopedic) and deliver with a normal tone. I reckon it would be better.
Final Score: 26 Well it may seem a pretty "not-high" score, but I'm sure if you do some more work on it, the outcome will rock!
Reviewer: It's gneomI 08:21, 5 February 2007 (UTC)

Definately needs to be re-reviewed. --Emmzee the FuriousSpam me! Don't click here!

edit From Pee Review

I'm putting this through Pee Review again, tell me what you think. --Emmzee the FuriousSpam me! Don't click here!

Humour: 7 Starts out strong, loses a bit of steam towards the end, but overall a funny piece.
Concept: 9 I like it a lot.
Prose and formatting: 7 I love the frantic conspiracy-theorist tone. Its used well in this article. I think the formatting could use some work though (esp. in the area covering the wars).
Images: 5 I like the ones that are there, but it definitely needs more.
Miscellaneous: 9 You and I think similarly when it comes to word linking, which I like a lot.
Final Score: 37 I definitely dig this article. I made a few minor edits, but I think that you're on exactly the right track. I recommend that you go through with the next edits yourself, as you are doing well with the humor so far. There may be a few grammar issues that fall outside the article's styling; if you need any help with those issues, feel free to leave me a message to that effect. Good stuff. :)
Reviewer: THINKER 06:03, 15 April 2007 (UTC)
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