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This Page is not finshed yet, but I wanna see if I'm doing ok--→☃☭Mr.Huffy☭☃← 12:24, 27 April 2007 (UTC)
|Humour:||7||Like the idea of a dull person trying to make thier equally dull village sound interesting. I think it might be funnier if the narrator didn't realise just how tedious they were being and kept pileing on more and more obscure facts, like:
'four years ago the milk float broke down, there was no tea for three days, dark times indeed, very dark times. I thought about ending it with a bottle of toliet duck. But lucklily countdown was on, wouldn't want to miss coundown. So Richard Whitley actually saved my life, i wrote him a letter, he didn't relpy.'
'Blandford was third in the 1970 East Anglia pig breeding trials. Its a source of pride to this day, we actually melted down the village war memorial and produced a crude cast iron replica of the third best pig. '
'Half the residents have been comatose since 1982. We keep them in a special fridge.'
|Concept:||7.5||I Liked the idea, it just needs expanding slighlty, I think i'll add a little too it. You could hint at some sort of dark secret lurking beneath the tedium. ( As if its really some sort of ruse to keep strangers away.) This can be accomplished by a few cryptic refrences to missing tourists Who they found 'headless down a well.' and vague mentions of 'equinox rituals by the old stone circle.' and how: 'parish preists never last more than six months here.'|
|Prose and formatting:||6||Sentence structure needs a little work but its nothing major.|
|Images:||5||needs a few more images.|
|Miscellaneous:||7||Don't know what this is for.|
|Final Score:||32.5||Overall I like the idea, just needs working on and expanding.|
|Reviewer:||--Winstanley1 12:54, 27 April 2007 (UTC)|
Thanks! I might steal some of your ideas if thats ok cheers--→☃☭Mr.Huffy☭☃← 01:33, 28 April 2007 (UTC)
edit From Pee Review
I've been helping to greatly expand this article and need some crititicism / opinions. --Winstanley1 20:44, 1 May 2007 (UTC)
I'd prefer if you didn't refer to Blandford as a Rewrite but as a joint project with me--→☃☭Mr.Huffy☭☃← 06:59, 2 May 2007 (UTC)
|Humour:||8||Well-turned bits of humour crop up all through the article.|
|Concept:||8||Well, it's a town innit? It deserves an article. Wikipedia has one.|
|Prose and formatting:||7||There are some misspllelled words (exited for excited, accept for except, little stuff). I feel there are some run-on sentences. But they're not horrible, more a matter of style.|
|Miscellaneous:||8||I like this quite a lot.|
|Reviewer:||----OEJ 16:41, 3 May 2007 (UTC)|
On Style: I might be inclined to break up long paragraphs (like the one on Lord Humphrey's hunting activities that segues into werewolf behavior). ----OEJ 16:41, 3 May 2007 (UTC)
oh noes the tea disaster!! LOLZ this article is brilliant!
edit From an ex-resident
Hah! I grew up in Blandford and I like this article, though alongside the old people and general Conservative attitude there was also a lot of kids and teenagers getting in fights and dealing drugs. I doubt there's a way to slip that in to the article as it is without changing the tone of it, though, and the tone is too good to change.--Holy shit it's Neopowell 15:19, February 9, 2011 (UTC)