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I don’t know anything about the story of David and Goliath. A section of this article has been completely empty for months now. Could someone fill the empty section with a satirical interpretation of the book? Maybe you might take inspiration from Bart Simpson’s dream of being David.Weri long wang 18:25, 12 January 2007 (UTC)
- Dang, I was really hoping to help you out with this one. The David/Goliath story is one of the more readable ones from the OT. Young Turk, big baddy (damn Phillistines!), rock, beheading. A nice tale once they cut out the blood and violence. The interesting bits follow later when King Dave sees Bathsheba the hottie basking on a neighbour's roof and this good and God-appointed King plots to have her husband killed so that he can have her. Of course He eventually punishes Dave; by killing his kid. Remember kiddies: all morality stems from the Bible. Or so I've heard.
- But I digress. I'm just not seeing a "funny" take on it. I'll ponder further, but don't hold your breath. If only you'd asked in July, when I had all the details in my head...
- You may want to swap it out with Joshua (first-person shooter/mmorpg), Isaiah (bat-shit insane text-based nuttery, where no matter what you type, you're screwed), or Song of Solomon ("adult" gaming, bow chicka bow-bow.... With such morally upright and completely non-filthy passages as "My beloved put in his hand by the hole of the door, and my bowels were moved for him." 5:4). SoS has real potential; it's short, easy to read and, um, vivid.
- Just a thought. Hopefully enough to get you moving. -- 05:52, 7 February 2007 (UTC)
The article is well written and designed, methinks, good parts being the relevant pics and the only grammar mistakes being a few missed comma's. However, the writing style is longwinded in some parts, and with only mild satire to spice it up, it tends to get boring. Also, while the opening paragraph and the pics suggest that it has a high emphasis on the videogame theme, it sounds more like a movie or sometimes even a plain textbook narration. This doesn't do the article much right, and that would be a shame seeing the fact that the author real seems to have put time and effort in this. Maybe I'm being whiney, but I think more could be done with the theme. --TheTerrorThatIsSkaPunk 22:09, 14 February 2007(European Timescale)
|Humour:||4||Struggled to create humour and didn't get the good laughs in the end. There are maybe a few smiles for people with whom you share a sense of humour.|
|Concept:||6||This is quite a neat idea. However it wasn't done justice, I'm afraid.|
|Prose and formatting:||4||Not very well structured, I hate to say. Pictures were out of place, sentence structure failed you and there were only two links. You need to categorise and get links to and from your page.|
|Images:||8||The pictures are well edited and suit the article well. They parody early platformers well.|
|Miscellaneous:||3||Please, lay off the Christains. I myself am one and warn you that many fanatical believers would be highly offended. Expletives were a bit off, too.|
|Reviewer:||Ikabu 07:05, 6 March 2007 (UTC)|