Talk:Barbie doll worship

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Humour: 6.5 The best line was the part about the feminists saying the dolls were too realistic and the russians saying that they weren't realistic enough. There were some other good parts scattered throughout, like the kid with a rediculous name because his parents had ADHD so they couldn't stop talking.
Concept: 8 A strange but entertaining idea.
Prose and formatting: 6 The prose is a little strange in places, which drags down the overall quality of the article a bit. There's some room for improvement there. Also, the article only could use a few more wiki-links, seeing as now it only has two.
Images: 7 Nothing specific to say here.
Miscellaneous: 5 Kill some of the meaningless random humor. I may be wrong, but that kool aid outburst and the whole Paul Newman thing seemed to be completely incomprehensible and unnecessary. If there was a joke behind the "Jesus Says" thing, it was far beyond my comprehension.
Final Score: 32.5 So, kill some of the randomness humor and maybe work on the prose a little, although that isn't a major issue. Maybe describe the actual phenomenon of Barbie Doll Worship a little more along with the description of Barbie's history as an anti-soviet weapon.
Reviewer: --THE 21:39, 22 April 2007 (UTC)


edit From Pee Review 2

Sir Ljlego, GUN VFH FIYC WotM SG WHotM PWotM AotM EGAEDM ANotM + (Talk)00:30, 30 April 2007 (UTC)

Humour: 5 A good idea which isn't executed terribly well. There are just too many cliches like satan, nixon, crossed out words, cool aid, etc. I think it would be better to approach this from a different angle, as if it was some sort of sinister cult.
Concept: 7 An intresting idea which needs reworking.
Prose and formatting: 6 Sentence structure is a bit awkward in places.
Images: 6 Images are fine.
Miscellaneous: 5.5 Needs more.
Final Score: 29.5 Overall the idea needs reworking to find a funnier approach.
Reviewer: --Winstanley1 10:12, 30 April 2007 (UTC)
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