Talk:Audi S4

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hello, I am the author, this is my first article, it took me three hours (don't delete!). I would like to know how to:

  • Make a caption. I copied the URL from the site, didn't upload thru Un.
  • Move pictures about, make them smaller, move them about the page.

Any other suggestions? I am open to them. --UNtrue! 03:39, 28 May 2007 (UTC)

I suggest that you should upload the images using Special:Upload. I did that with the first image. Also, add |right|thumb|insertcaptionhere after the image title to move to the right of the page and add a caption. Icons-flag-au Sir Cs1987 UOTM. t. c 03:58, 28 May 2007 (UTC)

Thank you-I tried to upload but my browser crashed.--UNtrue! 04:07, 28 May 2007 (UTC)

OK, got it to work. Any ideas to expand this article? Thanks --UNtrue! 04:15, 28 May 2007 (UTC)

I suggest you go to Pee Review. Icons-flag-au Sir Cs1987 UOTM. t. c 04:17, 28 May 2007 (UTC)

Thanks, I did --UNtrue! 15:53, 28 May 2007 (UTC)

edit From Pee Review

edit Audi S4

Hi, I was wondering if somebody would review my article that I wrote. It was my first one, took me about ~3 hrs. You may not be able to tell, but there are several auto-related jokes in there, and I want to keep with the basic concept, so some things may not make total sense. Thank You very much. -Author --UNtrue! 04:31, 28 May 2007 (UTC)

Humour: 7 The jokes tend to be lost in a fog of borderline coherence, but there are some good ones. See endnotes.
Concept: 5 Well, Wickedpedia has an article on the car.
Prose and formatting: 4 The main problem is confusing sentence construction, and occasional splelling errors.
Images: 5 The images are car pictures, appropriate but not particularly funny.
Miscellaneous: 5 This one needs work.
Final Score: 26
Reviewer: ----OEJ 03:10, 29 May 2007 (UTC)

Endnotes: On coherence:

"The Audi S4 was a flying monkey (species: genericatria)..."

Why flying monkey? After the first section flying monkeys do not resurface. This is confusing to me.

"Audi decided it looked to much like an Audi, and to take cues from the Lexus LS400 and Mercedes-Benz S320 for her design."

First off, it's too much with two o's. Second, do you mean Audi told Susan to take cues from the Lexus and Mercedes? That is not what you write. What you write does not make sense.

The problem is, it is very very hard to get readers to understand what you mean even if you write quite well. If there is any tiny opportunity for a reader to be confused by a sentence, you may rest assured that a reader will take that opportunity. And then they will go all googly-eyed, sigh, and click the "Random page" link before reading any more of your article.

Now, all that aside, I love the Chevrolet Cavalier Spaniel (though note spelling of "Cavalier"). I like "It was available through McDonald's Happy Meals. It was part of the trans-gender package." and I am fond of the plans for "598-way seats, hydraulics, a turbine Pratt & Whitney R6500 engine, and 26 airbags" in the new models.

In my experience, it is the coherent, understandable articles which receive the most interest. I really like writing silly, experimental stuff; but my only front page features are articles that are down-the-line coherent and understandable. I would advise you to work on making this article more coherent.

But it's quite good for a first article. Mine were much worse.

----OEJ 03:10, 29 May 2007 (UTC)

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