Talk:Asshole Personality Disorder

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The idea here is obvious. It's based on Wikipedia articles on similar Axis II disorders - the stuff in wikipedia:Category:Personality disorders. What it lacks, and what I'm really after, is something to give it that zing - David Gerard 11:13, 6 February 2007 (UTC)

Humour: 7 Good jokes -- "Recto-cranial inversion" indeed -- but you're right, needs a zing. See endnotes.
Concept: 8 Good idea, and quite intelligent satirical treatment of it.
Prose and formatting: 9 Excellent writing.
Images: 7 I wish there was a different pic of the head-up-the-rump guy. That one is very funny, but it's also very widely used.
Miscellaneous: 8 Good idea, good treatment; I like.
Final Score: 39
Reviewer: ----OEJ 16:32, 6 February 2007 (UTC)

edit Endnotes

On Zing: Zing? A flash of inspiration? An angelic visitation? I wish we could produce such things on demand, David. Geez. One can write an excellent idea with all the skill and competence of a clever Uncyclopedian and still end up feeling disappointed by the results. It happens to me all the time. Graham Greene once called writing the "saddest profession" and I usually think that's why: the diamond in the mind nearly always ends up looking like cheap cut glass once it's made real.

You might open up the possibilities -- add some case histories? Asshole disorder through the ages? The Darwinian benefits of assholic behavior in the boardroom, the barroom, and the bedroom? Chimps acting like assholes, casting light on the human variety? Causes of the disorder -- a concentration of trinitrotoulene and/or itching powder in the amygdala? Cerebral infection of E. coli?

I don't know. This article is an excellent idea, maybe it just needs a bit of time and some experimentation. Best of luck with it! ----OEJ 16:32, 6 February 2007 (UTC)

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