Well, i've had a stab at this to put together an article around my picture that's doing ok on VFP. I'd appreciated comment. no, yuochat 11:13, 8 January 2007 (UTC)
It's certainly very clever, though it possibly leans too heavily on the main jokes (also, there's a chance I've been following this too closely and thus the joke is old and spoiled for me, that's a common problem with jokes that develop over a long period of time).
I thought this was clever when I first heard it, and it is, but this again makes the question of the original picture more valid. It should have night goggles and a wetsuit, but I that has nothing to do with this article, really. The idea is a good one.
Prose and formatting:
Some paragraphs are too short, but your writing is pretty good, and there's nothing obviously wrong (like red links or something.
In the context of the article, the main pic makes even less sense than usual. It could use a re-imagining, but is otherwise very good.
Eh, this joke has been developing for so long, I worry that the "freshness" is already gone out of it, and it may prove stale, even as a newly fleshed out version. Again, this could just be that I've been wroking with you to help improve the pic for so long.
I think this article would benefit from a re-imagined main picture, but will still suffer from the staleness of a joke that's been bouncing around Uncyclopedia for a while now. It certainly has a place on Uncyclopedia, but if you want it on VFH, you may need to inject this with some fresh jokes from different angles.