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edit Academia

My first semi-complete article in a pretty long time. It's not what you think it's about. I think it's pretty funny, but very much so incomplete and in need of some serious polish. Along with your comments, please tell me where I can go buy some article polish, and what brand you recommend.

I think the history section goes on for too long, and might be better suited as a sub-page to the main article. Also, I think the tone may be inconsistent, since this was written piece-meal over the course of several days, with various moods. Of course, there are probably other problems, too.

So have a go at it, ye newly invigorated pee reviewers, and learn the benefits of a higher education. Sir Groovester | Contributions | Talk Page 06:04, 12 December 2007 (UTC)

is being reviewed by
Your Source for Fine Scented Pee
And Whatever Else Comes Out Of Him

I'm a VERY different reviewer than when you first yelled and cursed at me, Jim :D   Le Cejak <-> (Dec 13 / 17:54)

I don't think I cursed at you. I will admit to the yelling though. Best thing I ever did, right? Right...? Sir Groovester | Contributions | Talk Page 18:10, 13 December 2007 (UTC)
Well, it scared me. You're scaawy. WOOOoooOOOOooo   Le Cejak <-> (Dec 13 / 18:11)
Review the article, or I might have to throw a white sheet on my head and float around going "OOOOooooooOOOOooooOOOOooo! I am the ghost of fuUUUUUuuture Cajek, who diiiIIIeeed, because he did not reviiiieEEEEwwww Jim GroooOOOOoooovester's article in tiiiIIIiiimme."
Now that, would be scary.Sir Groovester | Contributions | Talk Page 18:16, 13 December 2007 (UTC)
Be patient! Humbug!   Le Cejak <-> (Dec 13 / 18:51)
Humour: 6.9 * Intro [8]

Pretty good intro, actually. Something I didn't expect.

  • 1 History never recovered from these guys
  • 1.1 Classical Era [7]

somewhat rambling, but I understood what you were talking about (philosophy major, holla). You could leave out that weirdness about Socrates and still have a solid section.

  • 1.2 Medieval Era [6]

more than average rambling. I still understood it, but it was fairly boring. I'm not sure you need this section. The gutenburg thing was weird, granted, but not necessary. Bringing in the TMNT was unexpected, and helped the score on this section.

  • 1.3 Renaissance [6]

Lol, uh, I don't really remember that in intro. REALLY random plus no ass-kicking?! Unless Renee Descartes kicked the universe's "ass".

  • 1.4 Enlightenment [7]

Leibniz... oh man... uh anyway, yeah slightly better. I think the problem with 1.2 and 1.3 is simple continuity and the "nobody-cares" factor. This one avoids both problems barely.

  • 1.5 Modern Day [8]

heh heh. wormholes. heh heh. Is that an in-depth review, Mr. Groovester????

  • 2 Acedemia Today [6]

Again, rambling. I'm starting to see your writing style is more formal and serious than average. That would work well for something not formal and serious instead of a treatise on the parody of academia, which is what this apparently is.

  • 3 Academia in Fiction
  • 3.1 In Movies [7]

Funny, but, unlike every other section in this article, it's not long enough.

  • 3.2 In Television [7]

What the... okay?

  • 3.3 In Video Games [8]

Sounds pretty kickass. This is an okay length.

  • 3.4 In Comics [7]

That's fine.

  • 4 Academia in the Future [6]
  • 5 Footnotes
  • 6 See Also
Concept: 8 above average concept here.
Prose and formatting: 9 The only problem I had was that it wasn't broken up enough. Other than that, this was written really well goods.
Images: 8 You had a good concept going with the pictures.
Miscellaneous: 8 averaged
Final Score: 39.9 I think I basically laid out the problems here. I'm not quite sure that this is VFH, it needs some more work. The problems that I saw were along the lines of "too long" and "too random". Hope I helped... you maniac... :D
Reviewer:   Le Cejak <-> (Dec 13 / 20:18)

edit Pee review number 2 for posterity's sake

Humour: 9 I Cracked up, does that justify this?... Your jokes are consistently funny and well informed.
Concept: 7 Still funny, but the concept isn't the strong point. Don't change it, but the article is more a sort of platform for jokes than a running tongue in cheek or satyrical article.
Prose and formatting: 8 Good prose, easy to read and no jokes are inhibitted by clumsy prose. the random english student over my shoulder says you blend writing styles very successfully.
Images: 7.5 good Images but I feel the way they all run down the right makes the page ugly and uninviting to look at. I would move The Doctor to the other side, also, maybe break between the images by replacing one with a youtube link and centre-ing it.
Miscellaneous: 7.9 Not Applicable
Final Score: 39.4 Really nice article, very little need be done to it. In fact, leave it if you want. My opinions are weak.
Reviewer: e^{i \pi} +1 = 0 \, ~ |DoS|Did|Yak|

edit Pee review #3 for posterity's sake

SecondThird go at Pee Review. I seriously considered the suggestions of the first pee review and the second and chopped, hacked, slashed, the long, unfunny bits into hopefully shorter, funnier pieces, as well as other improvements.

I should mention that I'm going for VFH on this one, so suggestions toward that end would be great. Sir Groovester | Contributions | Talk Page 03:05, 14 December 2007 (UTC)

This article is under review by
Gerry Cheevers.

Sayeth Gerry: shotgun!!
Humour: 8.5 average of all sections


great start, a solid introdutionc of where you're going with some funny thrown in for good measure. maybe one ore two sentences longer?

history never recovered:8

the initial paragraph is good, though it could also use another sentence or two. the first part of the socrates part is great, but the second part drags a little. keep the 'demanded his suidide' part, though. the medieval part is weird, but then once you get it (with the ninja turtles) it becomes awesome. enlightnenment is also good, but maybe reconsider them fighting for 'weeks'. 'hours' or 'a day' might fit better. modenr day is pretty average, but ends very solidly. overall this is a great section, worthy of praise and adomiration.

academia today: N/A

see 'future of academia' comments in this section

academia in fiction:9

your examples here are consistently good, made me chuckle, and do not merit being brokes down just so i can say 'made me lol' for each of them. the only setback is the repetitive line at the end of each example, which is very good, but just a little too hard to read (i had to read it three times myself before it sunk in.) maybe make that line somewhat easier to grasp, otherwise great section.

academia's future:8

i recommend either merging 'academia today' and 'academia's future', or extending both of them. 'today' doesn't seem to stand on its own. that being said, 'future' is a solid closing section.
Concept: 9 brilliantly twisted concept, great execution
Prose and formatting: 8 only minor mistakes here and there, just one redlink. i'm not a huge fan of footnote-jokes, but yours work fairly well. good staggering of the images. maybe throw a __NOTOC__ on the top to hide the table of contents, sometimes they can just be annoying.
Images: 8 i like what you did with the images. if you decide to extend 'academia today', throw an image on there, of a nerd with a lab coat or something. maybe something similar for 'future of academia'.
Miscellaneous: 8.4 averaged. god, i hate this section.
Final Score: 41.9 your final score is a robust 41.9, placing it in the 'more than adequate, might be VFH' category. i would certainly support this for VFH, and would even go so far as to nominate it, once you make any changes you feel would be necessary. excellent work, this. as always, feel free to pick up the Gerryphone at any time.
Reviewer: --SirGerrycheeversGunTalk 18:36, 15 December 2007 (UTC)

edit Get Up!

This article made me sad. Really. By the end of the "Acedemia Today" paragraph, I felt like I wanted to do something about it, that I wanted to get up and get those academics to regain their former image and *kick some ass*! Then I realised that this was juste some silly uncyclopedia article :'( Great article :D-- 02:34, 4 January 2008 (UTC)

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