HowTo talk:Become Stupid in 21 days

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This article was nominated for deletion on March 6, 2008.
The result of the discussion was Keep.

im a doomy r u a doomy 2??? this is grate wow xiting

come on guys, this is not funny at all :P

Vote to delete?(I wrote this article. ) It is fine by me to delete.--Jondel 01:11, 7 Oct 2005 (UTC) dffdfdffddf

edit Ignoring the comment above you.

This needs to be rewritten as an actual article in the HowTo: Namespace. Cause this seems like perfect stuff for HowTo: if rewritten correctly. --NXWave 09:48, 25 November 2007 (UTC)

edit Now this is kept, I really hope you add some pictures

It really needs em. MrN Icons-flag-gb HalIcon.png WhoreMrn.png Fork you! 00:37, Mar 7

edit The reviews are in!

Humour: 7 Really funny, I especially liked that it was quite subtle, meaning that, ironically, your reader has to have intelligence slightly greater than that of a starfish to find it funny. Although it almost seems mean destroying this guys life for no real reason, now that I’ve stopped laughing, and had time to reflect, it’s quite sad.
Concept: 7 I liked how you managed to spin out ‘hitting yourself with a brick’ over nine days; that takes real skill. And the side story of stealing his life and mum/mom gave it a little extra something.
Prose and formatting: 9 Almost perfect I’d say, except for a few non-sequiturs like mentioning “that guy who married [readers] mom” and then you marrying her eight days later, although that’s not particularly important. Also the common expression is ‘playing with traffic’ not in, but again I’m just being pedantic.
Images: 6 Some of them are quite good but I think the article could probably use more, definitely one of a particularly ordinary brick just as an example for the reader and maybe left align a couple more, that’ll make it a bit nicer looking. I have the same problem of not having a good photo shop so I just take ordinary pictures and make them funny with the caption, like what, I presume, you’ve done.
Miscellaneous: 7.5 (I averaged the score of the other fields). Vaseline doesn’t actually have much of a smell, unless my sense of smell is gone.
Final Score: 36.5 I really liked it! It flowed nicely and the tone was just right, like I said made me laugh out loud, congratulations on your first article too, I posted my first just a few days ago and this is actually my first pee review so I hope it you found it helpful. Have fun!
Reviewer: --orian57 22:32, 8 March 2008 (UTC)

Thanks a bunch Orian57!

Humour: 10 This is my first time handing out a 10 on humour, and I feel it is well deserved. I have earned more then one sideways glance from the teacher next to me and the librarian behind the desk. Although I generally say that a joke is never as funny the second time around, the slamming your head into a brick was, however often it was used, maintained how humourous it was throughout the article. Furthermore, the satire throughout the article was clearly present, and at the same time, almost believable. I am not going to tell you to read over HTBFANJS, you clearly already have!
Concept: 9 Becoming an idiot seems to be essential for the Uncyclopedia community to thrive, and this definitive article spells out very clearly how to join the wondrous ranks. I liked how you build up to stupidity, rather then plunging headlong into it, and built up to the article. Your article only hit one logistical snag, your article says “You know, the part of town where that guy who married your mom lives?” and later, you made it sound as though the author is out to marry your mom. Just a bit confusing, but meh…
Prose and formatting: 9 I state, with great joy, that I was completely unable to find any grammatical errors in this entire article, that your sentence structure is nicely varied, and above all, your article flows between sections. Your prose is helped greatly by the pictures, which, as far as I am concerned, are essential to the success of any article. I appreciated the fact you got through without a single red link, that is essential for any article to thrive.

This article only needs 1 thing to get a 10… More categories!

Images: 8 The images in this article contributed very well to the flow of the article, and all of them had an adequate caption underneath them, pertinent to the section they were next to. This article was longer then the average one I have seen, and the image to text ratio was bearable for my eyes, and all of the pictures were well spaced. My favorite was definitely the brick… excellent punch line on that one. The only suggestion I have would be to throw in a .gif image, if you can find any that will fit. If there are no worthy .gif images, then change that 8 to a 10.
Miscellaneous: 9 Avg’d as per Pee Review guidelines.
Final Score: 45 As for any pee review, I always assign homework for the writer to do. First off, I want you to
  1. Add a .gif image
  2. If you can make it work, add in a day 15 with your mom in Hawaii
  3. Add more categories.

If you can do all of those, that would do great (Number 1 and 2 are optional), I look forward to seeing this on VFH in the next two weeks.

Reviewer: Warm regards, Javascap 16:53, 17 March 2008 (UTC)

And thanks to you Javascap.

I must say, I'm quite surprised this has gone over so well. It's the first article I've written, and I personally thought it was a bit of a throw-away article. I never expected to get such a positive review, and certainly not two of them! You like me, You really, really like me! :P. I'm flattered. --OptyC Sucks! Icons-flag-us CUN 00:10, 19 March 2008 (UTC)

I'd say that last review was rather "generous" but it's a nice article, and a great rewrite. I'm looking forward to reading your next... ;-) MrN Icons-flag-gb HalIcon.png WhoreMrn.png Fork you! 00:13, Mar 19
I'd agree. I'm taking them with a grain of salt, but still I must confess I'm tickled. --OptyC Sucks! Icons-flag-us CUN 00:24, 19 March 2008 (UTC)

Huh... Javascape, made me look really stingy! To be fair that was my first review I probably just need experience to discern excellency from not-so-much-excellence. Although the brick pic was my idea! --orian57 00:18, 19 March 2008 (UTC)

Nah, I actually thought you were overly generous as well. But if I succeeded in making anybody LOL in their shorts, then I'm pleased. --OptyC Sucks! Icons-flag-us CUN 00:47, 19 March 2008 (UTC)

edit I think...

This is almost ready for VFH. Do you think you could tone down the references to your mum a bit? People are sick of that joke. A little bit more tarting up here and there (maybe another picture if you can manage it), and I will be happy to nominate this one Chris... MrN Icons-flag-gb HalIcon.png WhoreMrn.png Fork you! 13:17, Mar 24

Well, I guess I'm not sure how... "Me" hooking up with "your mom" is kind of a central part to the last half of the article. I'm open to suggestions so if you have any ideas I'd love to hear them. I've also got an image request in at RadX's for a section I want to add, but I'm beginning to think I might have better luck asking some random dude off the street. ;-) --OptyC Sucks! Icons-flag-us CUN 21:52, 26 March 2008 (UTC)
I will give it a few edits myself later, and you can see what you think after that... Yea, it can be a long wait over at Rad's place... Probably the best way I know of getting someone to do something for ya around here is normally to do a favour for the person in question first, and then maybe ask for one in return... Kinda like you reviewing my article I guess! You spotted it was by me, and thought... Hea, I know that guy, think I will help him out. You get what I'm saying I'm sure. Maybe pick one of the guys who makes good pics, and perhaps ask them via their talk page if there is anything you can do for them? Modus does some great chops... Maybe try seeing if there is anything you can do for him? Just a suggestion as always.... MrN Icons-flag-gb HalIcon.png WhoreMrn.png Fork you! 22:45, Mar 26
Hea! Looks like you sorted it! I guess we wait for Modus to get back from the printing room with the photo's... ;-) I will nominate this for VFH when you have added your pic and given it a final tidy up... Oh, Just a word of warning though... I know you have put a lot of effort into this, and it really is looking great, but as a caution over the whole VFD process... It can be a bit harsh over there, especially when someone has their first article nominated, so don't be too disappointed if this does not make it through. I think you have got a good chance, I'm just saying for you to not be too gutted if it does not make it. Strange things can happen from time to time, and the process is far from perfect... MrN Icons-flag-gb HalIcon.png WhoreMrn.png Fork you! 23:28, Mar 27
Aw hell, don't worry about me. I'd be far more surprised if it did make it through. I'm flattered you're thinking about nominating it in the first place and I'm mostly just curious to see the comments. --OptyC Sucks! Icons-flag-us CUN 23:35, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
Well, when you put the pic in, I will give it a quick going over myself, and then let you give it the final once over before I nominate it... Give it the best chance possible... :) MrN Icons-flag-gb HalIcon.png WhoreMrn.png Fork you! 23:42, Mar 27

edit Thank you!

Who ever or whom ever wrote this, THANK YOU! Brilliant, brilliant, article! /Me throws my self at the feet of the writer/writers, crying melodramatically and profusely thanking them. - 11:15 4 AprilSir FSt. (QotF BFF NotM) YTTETalk!Read!Sign!Whore!CMC!Pee!

It was MrN9000, and he loves it when you grovel. --OptyC Sucks! Icons-flag-us CUN 18:50, 5 April 2008 (UTC)
Well then I may just grovel some more.../Me <insert adverb> grovels at the feet of the <insert good descriptive word here> MrN9000 some more... (You will note my extremely creative mood...) Oh and you co-wrote it with him, right? - 08:00 5 AprilSir FSt. (QotF BFF NotM) YTTETalk!Read!Sign!Whore!CMC!Pee!
I wouldn't call what I do writing. --OptyC Sucks! Icons-flag-us CUN 15:46, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
Well between you, you came up with this. Congrats, in fact...templates all round...well coming up, soon... - 04:50 9 AprilSir FSt. (QotF BFF NotM) YTTETalk!Read!Sign!Whore!CMC!Pee!
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