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Judge has judged. So shall it be said, so shall it be done. As GOB once said,
 
Judge has judged. So shall it be said, so shall it be done. As GOB once said,

Revision as of 02:51, October 20, 2009

This is where you, the judges, put your results for the PLS. Please list your top 5 articles, in order, best article starting at 1. Remember, the deadline for results is the Xth of Farch. If you cannot complete judging before this deadline, please let me know on my talk page.

Scoring system based on judges' top fives will go as follows:

5 points for #1
4 points for #2
3 points for #3
2 points for #4
1 point for #5

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Well that other guy says that I'm supposed to leave feedback, so here goes: I was very disappointed. Only 1 of the 4 articles had a picture, and that picture was tiny. Most weren't put together extremely well either.

1. Rules of Baseball (The only one I would vote for on VFH, and only if it gets some pics. Pretty funny though.)
2. UnNews: Meteor shaped like Simon Cowell's head on collision course with Earth (The idea itself is funny, but the followthrough is less so. Still, it has a chance with some sprucing up.)
3. Military Action (Funny, but way too short, and lacks many actual ideas.)
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5. Age of Mythology (No nice way to say it. It's bad. It's pretty much a list, and not a very funny one at that. Still, 4th place is better than what I got when I entered last time. Sorry, but looking at this again, I can't bear to give it 4th place.)

Honestly I felt I was reading my own articles from when I was a noob, but with less pics. That's not a good thing. Sorry if I came off sounding a bit harsh.

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Best Alt. Namespace Article

  • Judge #1: ~Jewriken.GIF
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Back when I was a young PLS winner, judges took time to judge, and wrote stuff on the judge page, feedback, if you will. So that's what I'm gonna do, if only a bit.

user:Mahm00shA/UnTweets:Osama Bin Laden - Great concept, high potential for funny that I felt did not quite get reached. Still, a nice piece. I did chuckle as I read it, not laugh out loud, and while big lols are not the end-all of the PLS or Uncyc in general, unrealized potential is a minus.

User:Necropaxx/HowTo:Fish - Unfortunately this article does not work for me. The concept is fine, but I did not laugh much. I think the main issues are (1) the characters are not rock-solid consistent (example, this exchange: Yeah, you! You stay away from my son, you hear?! I don't want you getting near him! Aw, come on, dad! I like fishing! Can't I go fishing with grandpa again?.....Oh, I guess. But he has to let me know when he's taking you! I had no idea where you were! Your mother's worried sick! The father's transition is too abrupt, then quickly later we find out grandpa broke out of a home, making the father's response inconsistent), and (2) the situation comedy is not solid - good jokes are rare, and the running situation is too disjointed to be consistently humorous. The potential is there, but I think you can find a way to more consistently connect the metaphor of the building fishing drama with the subtle molestation/crazy-old-man subtext. This factor is pretty weak as it is. This is not an easy thing to do, but comedy is not easy.

User:Zheliel/Why?:Become a Butcher - Hm. The laugh factor here for me is near zero. The images are few and not funny. The language is weak and the voice inconsistent (what is the pretense here? Is it a failed infomercial, as the ending might poorly suggest? It's impossible to tell), and there are multiple typographical and grammatical errors, and don't kid yourself - this makes a huge difference. My suggestions here would be to tighten up the language and find a consistent pretense or scenario on which the reader can "hang his reader-hat" so to speak.

User:Padimir Padoffski/UnNews: Catholic Church outlaws sausages - There is some potential here, but I'm not sure it's quite pulled off as strongly as it could have been. If I understand it correctly, we are going for not-so-subtle irony - satirizing the fact that the church often decries poorly interpreted mundane things, and this decrying hurts the product not one bit - indeed things banned or decried by the church often prosper as a result. I get all that, and the idea could be amusing. But it could have been better written. Once again, I think tighter, more reporterly writing style would be more effective. As it is it's a bit too loose and wordy. The Onion does a great job of a true reporter's style. I could rewrite this article in a way I think is tighter to demonstrate; take the opening for instance: "Just days after attempting to remove the word "crack" from English dictionaries, the Catholic Church today condemned the manufacture, consumption and possession of sausage across the globe." This sounds more like the language of a reporter, I think. Other problem phrases: "after he took to" too wordy, "to this" is unnecessary, "have turned into" should probably just be "and", "with effigies.. being..." is passive and weak, "have praised" should just be "praised", etc. Also, the image caption is out of place, even if somewhat amusing.

User:Guildensternenstein/Insipid Sentimental Women's Novel - Well, you got curmudgeonly old me to laugh out loud right away; "big blue sky -- of tragedy." Hah! I got the insipidness right off. "Or some bullshit" shatters the fourth wall too soon, I think. The fourth-wall crumbling begins vaguely in character ("thinly veiled feminine/fertility symbol"), but I think maybe it should gradually get more and more blatant. "Shitty metaphor" - same thing. Maybe tone that down, like "not the strongest of metaphors," to where a slow reader might still be able to believe we are not breaking out, and a quick reader can feel superior because he already knows what's happening. Subtlety, yeah. Oh, and you missed something, and I can't believe you missed it. Where is the parallel red lollypop at the ending? Susie should snatch a red sucker from the hospital receptionist and stick it in her mouth, and the writer should way too obviously point out that it was probably cherry, just like the one she remembered so long ago or some shit. I'm just saying.... Anyway, nicely done. Funny, clever, well well written, images are great, top-notch satire.

User:PuppyOnTheRadio/UnNews:Australia says "You just don't understand our humour!" - Very funny, very nicely written, fun to read and great satire. There is little to say about how this could be improved, plus I don't understand Australian humor, so how could I possibly help?

User:Why do I need to provide this?/HowTo:Be Homeless in America - Amusing, poignant, very well written, excellent use of images and structure. The humor level isn't over-the-top, but it's very appropriate for the subject. This is an enjoyable read and a feature candidate for sure.

User:Orian57/UnRadio:Tricia Bellerose on Pirate FM - Cute and well written. I might surmise that there are some cultural references missed, but I must call the humor level, though amusing, somewhat low for me. Images are OK, but could not be described as great. This is one I would not know how to tell you to improve, because the prose is excellent and the characterizations seem consistent, but I just wasn't highly amused.

1. User:Guildensternenstein/Insipid Sentimental Women's Novel
2. User:PuppyOnTheRadio/UnNews:Australia says "You just don't understand our humour!"
3. User:Why do I need to provide this?/HowTo:Be Homeless in America
4. User:Orian57/UnRadio:Tricia Bellerose on Pirate FM
5. user:Mahm00shA/UnTweets:Osama Bin Laden

Judge has judged. So shall it be said, so shall it be done. As GOB once said,

"My name is Judge." Whose name is Judge?
"My name is" That's a strange name.
"Judge. My Name" Yes, I am judging your name. It am strange.
"Is" Oh, now you're correcting my grammar?

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3.User:Monika/The Prisoner (US Remake)
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