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Please give this a through review. An acquaintance with "A Series of Unfortunate Events" would help. Also, give me a high score. I hope this is good enough for VFH with a little work. --BlueflatcapsigMajor'GUN' Ggarfield, Le Marquis de Nofu .Complex! 14:34, 24 December 2007 (UTC)

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Humour: 7 good attempt at parody of the series. I did find that your links were cute as well, but seems like you forgot about them after chapter 6. That could be attended to. Also, remember that things were always dreary in the books. Descriptions of houses, weather, etc. I think it rarely was a 'pleasant' day, as i recall.
Concept: 7.5 You did pretty good following Lemony's style of writing, as well as copying a few of his 'devices' (explaining phrases, etc.) I did notice that you didn't use one obscure word, and define it. He does that in every book. I'm also surprised no-one had done these books here before. Glad you thought of it.
Prose and formatting: 6 This needs a bit of work. Mostly spelling and a few phrasings that don't sit well linguistically. I will do a 'proofread' tonight and fix a few things up for you. Also, i would suggest adding a 'bio' page, like Lemony does at the end of his books. That could be a funny bit on its own. I think that would help it out a bit.
Images: 6 Images fit the piece, nothing outstanding or overtly humorous on its own. (one little nitpick, the image of the baby, the pasting job on the finger is a bit off. told you i was nitpicking
Miscellaneous: 6.625 average of the above, and coincidentally the number of NON-persecuted Jews living in the world today.
Final Score: 33.125 I am thinking of changing my reviews to match those of the Famine's Acceptance Level standards...what do you think?
Reviewer: Finnius.png

I own the first 6 or 7 books, I could burn through a couple of them at work to refresh my memory of Lemony's style, and give you a few more suggestions later on in the talkpage of the article (if you dont mind).

Also, I will do the proofread on this piece tonight as well. Just reiterating. I know i let this review lag a day. (things really did come up)

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