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*'''Comment'''. I'm aware that you guys value this article and that you've put passion into it...but I don't think it's ready. I think you ought to be willing to make some heavy cuts and to consider an over all concept before working away on such a large article and such a major subject matter. This article seems like a wikipedia article where each section or paragraph consists of accurate facts...however there is a sort of connected and slightly humerous extra fact tagged at the end of each section as a sort of punchline. I don't really see where the parody is this and over all I can't figure out what the concept of this article is. In addition there seem to be several random paragraphs that don't connect much with the rest of the article. I also think there are a few formatting issues. Quite a few paragraphs are really wordy and I think some tightening would help the humour (the Guillotine paragraph for example). A couple of the images are humerous but I'm not sure they've been strategically placed with the best of captions. As I said the article is also rather long and could use some heavy heavy chopping IMO. The final section Napoleons legacy, is pretty funny and more or less well written in my humble opinion. If that passion of yours went into making some tough decisions and shaping the whole article within a clear idea and humour strategy...you'd end up with a stellar article. {{User:Shabidoo/sig}} 04:50, October 15, 2013 (UTC)
 
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Article: Napoleonic Wars

Score: 2

Nominated by: Sir ScottPat (talk) White Ensign Scotland Flag 1 Compassrose VFH UnS NotM WotM WotY 14:23, October 13, 2013 (UTC)
For: 2
  1. Symbol for vote Half Self-Nom and For From the makers of Ukraine and Cossacks, Sir Anton and Sir ScottPat present to you a feat of many months of work and dedication and many rows and language arguments...the Napoleonic Wars in glorious HD, 3D form! Sir ScottPat (talk) White Ensign Scotland Flag 1 Compassrose VFH UnS NotM WotM WotY 14:23, October 13, 2013 (UTC)
  2. Symbol for vote Less Than Half Self-NotNom and For Today. In all the cinemas. Anton (talk) Uncyclopedia United 17:21, October 13, 2013 (UTC)
Against: 0

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  1. Realized and produced by S.Patt and A.199.
  2. Costumes, decorations and music by S.Pike
  3. Featuring N.Bonaparte, French peasants, Spanish bulls, Kutuzov and others. Anton (talk) Uncyclopedia United 17:26, October 13, 2013 (UTC)
  • Comment. I'm aware that you guys value this article and that you've put passion into it...but I don't think it's ready. I think you ought to be willing to make some heavy cuts and to consider an over all concept before working away on such a large article and such a major subject matter. This article seems like a wikipedia article where each section or paragraph consists of accurate facts...however there is a sort of connected and slightly humerous extra fact tagged at the end of each section as a sort of punchline. I don't really see where the parody is this and over all I can't figure out what the concept of this article is. In addition there seem to be several random paragraphs that don't connect much with the rest of the article. I also think there are a few formatting issues. Quite a few paragraphs are really wordy and I think some tightening would help the humour (the Guillotine paragraph for example). A couple of the images are humerous but I'm not sure they've been strategically placed with the best of captions. As I said the article is also rather long and could use some heavy heavy chopping IMO. The final section Napoleons legacy, is pretty funny and more or less well written in my humble opinion. If that passion of yours went into making some tough decisions and shaping the whole article within a clear idea and humour strategy...you'd end up with a stellar article. ShabiDOO 04:50, October 15, 2013 (UTC)

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